Working on a Resident Evil Novel

[findonovan95]

I'm working on a Resident Evil Novel if any of you would like to know more about it please post your questions in this thread I'm not finished well in fact I've just started but I can tell you where it's based, what the source of the virus is the first mini-boss and stuff like that .

[Dante2014]

Word of advice, save your Q&A's FAQ's until a good portion of it is done, there's nothing more annoying like hearing about unfinished work with the creator getting credit for a mere premise.

Sorry if that sounded harsh, but if you knuckle down and post the first chapter, ill be happy to read it and help with any ideas you may have for it, it just seems a tad premature to ask for questions on something thats not even been posted yet.

[findonovan95]

Word of advice, save your Q&A's FAQ's until a good portion of it is done, there's nothing more annoying like hearing about unfinished work with the creator getting credit for a mere premise.

Sorry if that sounded harsh, but if you knuckle down and post the first chapter, ill be happy to read it and help with any ideas you may have for it, it just seems a tad premature to ask for questions on something thats not even been posted yet.

Sorry, I get what you mean though. It must be annoying but anyway, I'm attaching the Chapter1.txt to this post so open it and tell me what you think.

[thezombiemessia]

Upon reading Chapter 1, here are my thoughts:

Contradictions:

- It is set 10 years after the Mansion Incident...so this has to probably take place directly after RE5. This would mean that TriCell are still very much a large power in the world.

- The T-virus still exists, as The Agency is known to have a sample.

Other problems:

- You refer to Leon as "the ex-R.P.D officer" despite the fact that he has since become a Government agent. The chances are, he'd probably just be referred to as Agent Kennedy.

- Chris would probably be referred to as Agent Redfield.

- The chances of the B.S.A.A sending an agent into a mission with an outside agent are minimal. It is also likely that other B.S.A.A agents and teams would be sent in with them.

The actual story:

- This is written more like a script with sidenotes than an actual story.

I honestly suggest you get down some of your favourite books and flick through them to see what I mean.

A novel or a book will contain descriptions of characters, locations and events, along with dialogue.

What you've written is a script.

- Where's the backstory? You've said that the Leeches have returned...but where from? How? Why are they in England of all places?

As far as we're aware, the Leeches were all killed off when Raccoon City was bombed.

- Who are group 324? Why is the whole group talking as one?

- Who is the commander? What is he the commander of? What is his name?

- Why did acid come from the Leech-pilot? Are these a new breed of Leeches?




You obviously have a plot in mind, and have probably worked a lot of it out in your head...but you need to work on presentation and detail.

[leon.s]

hey fin great first chapter and yes referring to leon as an ex rpd is needed cause thats what he is trust me and i know this guy personally he will do this and he will do this brilliantly

[Sinister]

hmm where is the first chapter? you know the chapter where the characters are developed, Leon S. Kennedy sitting in an airport sipping some coffee whislt waiting for his flight and remembering the good old days, using already developt characters is not an excuse to forget about character development.

and I cant see the image in your head, you have to tell it to me, "shoot the tanks" before describing tanks is highly irritating

edit: they didnt even refer to him as ex rpd agent in re4, and is highly unusual, survivor of racoon city incident would haved worked though, they wouldnt refer to him as ex-sales assitant if he had been working at walmart

[findonovan95]

O.K. for a start that isn't even the real chapter, it's a draught. Secondly I'm not the one writing this, it's my brother who's thirteen so I'm sure it's full of mistakes. He likes writing and he thought he'd write a novel on his favourite game. I'm sure you guys all love crushing a kids dreams. You must realy feel good about yourselves. I think it's pretty good but since this is only a draught I'm sure he's gonna fix all the mistakes when he makes the real story if it looks so much like a script maybe it will become a script who knows.

[Tenebra]

Nobody's crushing anything, Findonovan95, it's simply called constructive criticism and taken with a smile to make things better.

Another suggestion would be to say straight away that it's your 13 yo little brother and not you writing as you suggested in your first post; it helps other members putting things into perspective. Get your little brother to read lots and lots of books to see how they're written - he shouldn't be playing RE at his age!

[Dante2014]

Well, which would you prefer?

People being dishonest to save your feelings and not telling you how to ever improve, meaning your 13 year old brother gets seriously hurt when he meets the wrong person who'd poke fun at his work, swear at him, mock him and crush all desire to write again?

Or would you rather be told of his faults, so, even if it hurts now, he can still fix them at the first "draught" where no harm can be truly done and the effort amounts to something good?

on a completely unrelated note - 1995 + 13 = 2009... (its not wrong...)

[findonovan95]

I know, I'm sorry about my earlier post I just got realy angry. I think I get what y'all mean, I'll tell him and he can fix the mistakes himself. I must say the writing is pretty good though, isn't it?
-Tricell were finished off in RE5.
-T-Virus? Maybe not dead, will be fixed if so.
-Leon is an ex-RPD Agent, Chris is an ex-S.T.A.R.S agent they can both be called that.
-What's more likely a Virus that turns people into living dead or Agents from two different groups being sent to a mission together.
-Maybe it'll become a script, who knows.
-Commander and Group 324 are just temporary, will be changed on a later basis.
-Newly evolved leeches, bomb exposed the ones that lived to radiation, they bred, evolved and moved on to england. Probably hitched a ride on a cargo ship or something.
-Do you think I should tell him to put in that Wesker was revived by the leeches or is that way to far-fetched?