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Dante2014
26-08-08, 12:45
Im working on this story, im an aspiring writer.

The idea came along when I was watching the movie Dracula 2000 and a friend of mine digs vampires, and I like zombies, so we had a discussion as to which was better, so I made a story about circumstances leading up to a fight, and ive been working on rules to even the odds.

I am aware that a movie on similar lines was released, but apparently was awful, so I decided to work on something better. :)

1873, Germany
A German duke and English noblewoman fall in love, although the Duke is actually a vampire, he is kind and loving towards his people and his beloved is the only one who knows his secret, but loves him all the same.

However, Her father, who hates the Duke, finds this out, outraged, he sends two vampire hunters (claiming to be the finest) to Germany in order to assassinate him, the two catch him off guard since he is complacent from living in peace and stab him through the heart, thinking that the noblewoman has also become a vampire, they stab her in the heart, unlike the seasoned vampire she is human and quickly dies.

The distraught duke kills the assassins and breaks a sacred vampire rule, back in the darker ages of the vampire, the venom of their fangs can bring back the dead to serve as menial servants, this was outlawed, however, he believed that he could bring his beloved back from the dead completely should be exposed to enough venom and her recent death, using the venom he milked from his teeth over the centuries, he embalms her corpse in the venom.

Initially, she appears normal and returns to life as normal, but she gradually degrades, becoming increasingly hungrier, then begins to crave meat, then raw meat and begins to attack living animals, the Duke is scared and imprisons her in a cell filled with luxury, over a month she begins to rot and her isolation drives her to insanity, using her decomposed state, she breaks free of the cell by bending and breaking her bones and begins a killing and devouring everyone in her path, the Dukes city is soon overwhelmed with zombies.

Realising his mistake, he calls forth his vampire comrades and they wage war with the zombified, among the chaos, the Duke confront his beloved, and realises she is no longer human and bites her neck, she bites his neck and they embrace, the vampire is poisoned by his own modified venom and she has the only thing giving her life sucked out of her.

The vampires realise that they cant kill the noblewoman by normal means and breaking the embrace would re-awaken her, in respect, the two are placed in a coffin and the coffin covered in molten steel by the vampire kind, sealing the two in a smooth metal shell, and drop it in to the ocean to stop anyone disturbing it.

1996 - New York
A team of researchers find the metal shell in the European ocean. Curious as to what it could contain, they take it back to their labs in New York, on opening it, they find the dried corpses of the Duke and Noblewoman, they separate the corpses and send each for further studies in opposite ends of the city.

The zombie noblewoman is being studied when her corpse is exposed to water, the moisture revitalises part of her exposed brain and she comes to life, devouring a researcher and assimilating the flesh and gradually returning to her former power and begins to rampage in New York.

The vampire duke returns to life as he is no longer poisoned by the venom in the bite and feeds on a blood pack to restore his body, on realising that he is separated and it means his beloved is possibly alive and dangerous, he tries to escape but is caught by a researcher who thinks he is breaking in, although he tries to reason with them, they don t believe him until they overhear events elsewhere in the city and co-operate with him.

Meanwhile, in a cinema, a hypochondriac usher and his girlfriend are making out in the cinema pantry when they hear commotion from outside, on noticing the zombies they are narrowly saved by a Russian man who goes in to hiding with them, he reveals is that he is what is known as a "Soulbreaker", humans who are trained fight and kill immortal beings in order to maintain the power of the human race, but in a twist, reveals that he has absolutely no intention of saving people, he is using the two for his own benefit, should he need them, they will die, should they escape, they will be on their own and wont survive.

A battle ensues between the vampires, zombies and the survivors.
(C) 2008, R.A. Locke

Comments and thoughts welcomed.

[edit] Fixed italic, spelling errors

The Spirit
26-08-08, 17:19
A very creative story, very well done 1st paragraph.:)

Although I felt some that the information just kept on jumping very fast, a lot has happened if you compare the 1st paragraph witht he second, I like the details a bit more with the story. Nothing wrong with yours its just my opinion.;)

You got me intrested. now lets see how you unfold it :)

Dante2014
26-08-08, 18:41
Thanks.

Its just a synopsis, which is just the key points of the story, the full version has alot more detail but I dont want to post it here just yet.

seth ranson
27-08-08, 16:19
[...] stab him through the heart [...]
How can the story go on after that? I always thought vampires would die after you stab them through the heart?
Apart from that I like the story. You should make a movie with that story.

thezombiemessia
27-08-08, 17:43
[...] stab him through the heart [...]
How can the story go on after that? I always thought vampires would die after you stab them through the heart?
Apart from that I like the story. You should make a movie with that story.

Depends on the mythos. Some will only stay dead if the stake is left in the heart (remove it, and they will come back). Some can only be killed with a silver stake to the heart, others can only be killed by having a stake to the heart and then decapitation, etc.

As a quick note Dante, a synopsis is generally suppossed to be short, and the itallic style you have put the writing in makes it harder to read (for me at least).

The Spirit
27-08-08, 19:24
Its a fantasy story & fantasy stories have no boundries. As long as you are keeping your reader entertained with your text, you are gettingt he job well done.

Its a very well written if it is your first try Dante?:)

Dante2014
28-08-08, 06:43
[...] stab him through the heart [...]
How can the story go on after that? I always thought vampires would die after you stab them through the heart?
Apart from that I like the story. You should make a movie with that story.

Depends on the mythos. Some will only stay dead if the stake is left in the heart (remove it, and they will come back). Some can only be killed with a silver stake to the heart, others can only be killed by having a stake to the heart and then decapitation, etc.

Correct.

The vampires in this story are basically super human, they drink blood to keep their humanity, however, should they become wounded, it slips and they become undead, powered with the blood stored in their bodies, in this state, their bodies use less energy and can do far more on very little and they no longer have the limitations normal humans have, meaning they can be stabbed, shot, beaten, just as long as they drink blood afterwards, they can completely recover any wound.

And this adds to the uselessness of the vampire hunters, they try and kill him with little grasp of the truth.

As a quick note Dante, a synopsis is generally suppossed to be short, and the itallic style you have put the writing in makes it harder to read (for me at least).
And ive tried to keep it short as possible but I suppose its more of a summary than a synopsis, and ive fixed the italics, im looking forward to hearing what you think of this. :)

Its a fantasy story & fantasy stories have no boundries. As long as you are keeping your reader entertained with your text, you are gettingt he job well done.

Its a very well written if it is your first try Dante?:)

Ive been writing for some time now but this is the first time anything ever gone public, maybe because its the first thing that ive tried and felt very strongly about and dont want to get my ideas torn to pieces, but without taking a risk, ill never learn how to improve my work, that said, ill probably release a few of my other stories here.

Thanks for the positive feedback guys.

The Spirit
28-08-08, 18:36
Ive been writing for some time now but this is the first time anything ever gone public, maybe because its the first thing that ive tried and felt very strongly about and dont want to get my ideas torn to pieces, but without taking a risk, ill never learn how to improve my work, that said, ill probably release a few of my other stories here..

Arent you going to continue this story? :)

thezombiemessia
29-08-08, 11:55
I think the storyline is certainly interesting. I like how the zombies are actually created by the vampires...something that is very rarely implemented into a storyline like this.

Im not sure if you meant to include it, but i also like the mild reference to The Mummy as well...in the way that the Noblewoman regains her health/flesh/etc by consuming living people.

The story needs to be edited a little, due to a few errors in wording, etc...but everything else seems fine.


From one writer to another, i like this story :)

Dante2014
30-08-08, 12:31
Arent you going to continue this story? :)

Maybe.

Its very gory in places, maybe if I post it on another site with the appropriate warnings and ask a moderator, theyll advise me on what to do, I could censor it, but it wouldnt be as good.

If anyone knows a good art site I could post it (preferably one purely for writing) that would be great. :)

I think the storyline is certainly interesting. I like how the zombies are actually created by the vampires...something that is very rarely implemented into a storyline like this.

Im not sure if you meant to include it, but i also like the mild reference to The Mummy as well...in the way that the Noblewoman regains her health/flesh/etc by consuming living people.

The story needs to be edited a little, due to a few errors in wording, etc...but everything else seems fine.


From one writer to another, i like this story :)

Yeah, the concept of zombies being made from vampires has been done before but its been purely mythical, im going for an I Am Legend-esque approach with the realism.

The Mummy reference was completely coincidental, but youre right, they are alike, I had to make her a pretty strong zombie otherwise it wouldnt be much of a fight and could have been easily killed off, but since I wanted it to be set in the present as well I had to make her a powerful leader type, which is sort of a clich‚ but the leader-zombie type thing (in films like Land Of The Dead) had zombies on the same level, so when I made one crazy powerful it kind of adds to the tension of a real threat and doesnt resort to complete flukes to ensure her survival.

I am making an effort to fix my grammar and spelling, so this story can move to something taken alot more seriously, Im trying various websites for tutorials as I really want to improve on this.

Thanks for the positive feedback, im glad you like it. :)

Nocturnal Stillness
10-09-08, 17:49
An interesting idea. If your still after a website to put your story up on try this one:

www.nocturnalstillness.com

check it out it may be the site your after.

Just to point it out the site is mine so I know it will be interested in horror stories.

Its upto you however if you think the site is suitable for you.

Dante2014
10-09-08, 18:30
Ah, Thankyou, ill be checking that out. :)

Nocturnal Stillness
11-09-08, 17:54
Hi Dante,

regardless of whether you decide to use the website good luck on the idea.

I also had an idea for a story where the infection that caused vampires would only turn certain people while the rest would just become undead zombies it all depended on a persons DNA. However I dropped the idea due to the infection rate, it would spread too quickly for a story to form.

Looking at your idea from a writers perspective I have a few questions Id like to ask; you may answer if you wish but think of these as things you should be able to answer in the story.

1) the zombies in your story are the result of venom produced by the vampires fangs; but how much venom is needed? the noblewoman was ressurected by a large quantity of the venom amassed over centuries right? but how are the others produced is a simple bite from her enough to transmit the infection? or is her variation of the venom more potent?

2) How are the vampires created? is a simple bite enough? or is something more required? in your explanation they are super human and drink blood to keep their humanity? what would happen if one wasnt able to drink for awhile? how much can they regenerate as well? is there a limit to it?


these questions are imo important to be answered and even if not mentioned in the story the author should know. it helps form the universe, i got the advice from a writing forum I belong to and I believe its a good bit of advice to pass on.

Good luck with it again

matthew