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Hi everyone! I´m working on a comic based on monster hunter. Here's my deviant art: http://bumboya.deviantart.com/
I hope you like it!
Wow, its really cool man, love it!
But the plot is pretty simple i mean, they will come, save him(or not), kill the beast and the point will be: With friends you can achieve greater tasks or something like that :D
Other than the plot its briliant
Wow, its really cool man, love it!
But the plot is pretty simple i mean, they will come, save him(or not), kill the beast and the point will be: With friends you can achieve greater tasks or something like that :D
Other than the plot its briliant
Your idea of the plot is wrong xD. Thanks for watching it
(Sorry if my english is bad >.<)
Your idea of the plot is wrong xD. Thanks for watching it
(Sorry if my english is bad >.<)
No need to apologize and besides, you only wrote 2 sentences so i dont think you could mess up something there(3 sentences if you count the sorry part :D)
I just want to point out some things i noticed in the comic.
In the first page, he says: When i tell you, run away and dont stop.
Then he says: Hide and wait for help to arrive.
So ok, what should she do? Run away and not stop or hide and wait for help? She could run away, then hide and then wait but its a bit confusing, just give her one option, you know what i mean.
On the third page, i think he should say: Damm you, old one, not Damn you the old one. I just dont think THE should be there but if im wrong, correct me someone please, im not sure with it. Also, you spell damn wrong, its damm with m.
I´ve been trying years to hunt you down, not I´ve been years trying.
If I at least had my equipment, not If at least had my equipment.
Yeah, and rewrite the sentence: And i have to find you while im doing a dammed herb picking! It doenst sound right to me with And at the beginning of the sentence.
Please someone from england check my advices if they are good, you guys(or gals) know better english than i do :)
Nocturnal Stillness
22-07-09, 17:06
No need to apologize and besides, you only wrote 2 sentences so i dont think you could mess up something there(3 sentences if you count the sorry part :D)
I just want to point out some things i noticed in the comic.
In the first page, he says: When i tell you, run away and dont stop.
Then he says: Hide and wait for help to arrive.
So ok, what should she do? Run away and not stop or hide and wait for help? She could run away, then hide and then wait but its a bit confusing, just give her one option, you know what i mean.
On the third page, i think he should say: Damm you, old one, not Damn you the old one. I just dont think THE should be there but if im wrong, correct me someone please, im not sure with it. Also, you spell damn wrong, its damm with m.
I´ve been trying years to hunt you down, not I´ve been years trying.
If I at least had my equipment, not If at least had my equipment.
Yeah, and rewrite the sentence: And i have to find you while im doing a dammed herb picking! It doenst sound right to me with And at the beginning of the sentence.
Please someone from england check my advices if they are good, you guys(or gals) know better english than i do :)
"The Old One" is the right phrase as that is what he is called,
also he has spelt it correctly it is spelt Damn
anyway the comic is a nice start well done.
also he has spelt it correctly it is spelt Damn
Wow, thats new to me.
Is damn same as damm?
Nocturnal Stillness
22-07-09, 19:57
Wow, thats new to me.
Is damn same as damm?
I've never heard of the word Damm so I can't say for certain. But I am certain it is Damn, well in English it is anyway
Well Damm is something storing up water at some lake (you know the beginning of Goldeneye?), and Damn is like in Damnation, Damned, Damnit (oops... sos . somuch cursing at one spot, is this OK?) ...
I really love the arts, looks like professional. Guess you've often heard that one centence I have to hear all the time (although my arts would probably never reach such a crafted final point): "you should do into comics" or "why don't you do something with it/your talent?".
I've never heard of the word Damm so I can't say for certain. But I am certain it is Damn, well in English it is anyway
It seems i´ve been writing damm for quite a few years and just now i discovered its with N :D
Most of the english words i know i learned from the internet so it seems i memorized someones damm typo :D
Nocturnal Stillness
24-07-09, 18:40
Well Damm is something storing up water at some lake (you know the beginning of Goldeneye?),.
Natea, I've always known it as Dam for that meaning. I've never seen it with 2 m's
Oops, that could be. Well, in german it's Damm.