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findonovan95
09-05-09, 11:41
I'm working on a Resident Evil Novel if any of you would like to know more about it please post your questions:confused: in this thread :D I'm not finished well in fact I've just started but I can tell you where it's based, what the source of the virus is the first mini-boss and stuff like that :cool:.
Word of advice, save your Q&A's FAQ's until a good portion of it is done, there's nothing more annoying like hearing about unfinished work with the creator getting credit for a mere premise.
Sorry if that sounded harsh, but if you knuckle down and post the first chapter, ill be happy to read it and help with any ideas you may have for it, it just seems a tad premature to ask for questions on something thats not even been posted yet.
findonovan95
09-05-09, 13:53
Word of advice, save your Q&A's FAQ's until a good portion of it is done, there's nothing more annoying like hearing about unfinished work with the creator getting credit for a mere premise.
Sorry if that sounded harsh, but if you knuckle down and post the first chapter, ill be happy to read it and help with any ideas you may have for it, it just seems a tad premature to ask for questions on something thats not even been posted yet.
Sorry, I get what you mean though. It must be annoying but anyway, I'm attaching the Chapter1.txt to this post so open it and tell me what you think.:)
thezombiemessia
09-05-09, 14:29
Upon reading Chapter 1, here are my thoughts:
Contradictions:
- It is set 10 years after the Mansion Incident...so this has to probably take place directly after RE5. This would mean that TriCell are still very much a large power in the world.
- The T-virus still exists, as The Agency is known to have a sample.
Other problems:
- You refer to Leon as "the ex-R.P.D officer" despite the fact that he has since become a Government agent. The chances are, he'd probably just be referred to as Agent Kennedy.
- Chris would probably be referred to as Agent Redfield.
- The chances of the B.S.A.A sending an agent into a mission with an outside agent are minimal. It is also likely that other B.S.A.A agents and teams would be sent in with them.
The actual story:
- This is written more like a script with sidenotes than an actual story.
I honestly suggest you get down some of your favourite books and flick through them to see what I mean.
A novel or a book will contain descriptions of characters, locations and events, along with dialogue.
What you've written is a script.
- Where's the backstory? You've said that the Leeches have returned...but where from? How? Why are they in England of all places?
As far as we're aware, the Leeches were all killed off when Raccoon City was bombed.
- Who are group 324? Why is the whole group talking as one?
- Who is the commander? What is he the commander of? What is his name?
- Why did acid come from the Leech-pilot? Are these a new breed of Leeches?
You obviously have a plot in mind, and have probably worked a lot of it out in your head...but you need to work on presentation and detail.
hey fin great first chapter and yes referring to leon as an ex rpd is needed cause thats what he is trust me and i know this guy personally he will do this and he will do this brilliantly:yell:
hmm where is the first chapter? you know the chapter where the characters are developed, Leon S. Kennedy sitting in an airport sipping some coffee whislt waiting for his flight and remembering the good old days, using already developt characters is not an excuse to forget about character development.
and I cant see the image in your head, you have to tell it to me, "shoot the tanks" before describing tanks is highly irritating
edit: they didnt even refer to him as ex rpd agent in re4, and is highly unusual, survivor of racoon city incident would haved worked though, they wouldnt refer to him as ex-sales assitant if he had been working at walmart
findonovan95
01-06-09, 10:57
O.K. for a start that isn't even the real chapter, it's a draught. Secondly I'm not the one writing this, it's my brother who's thirteen so I'm sure it's full of mistakes. He likes writing and he thought he'd write a novel on his favourite game. I'm sure you guys all love crushing a kids dreams. You must realy feel good about yourselves. I think it's pretty good but since this is only a draught I'm sure he's gonna fix all the mistakes when he makes the real story if it looks so much like a script maybe it will become a script who knows.
Nobody's crushing anything, Findonovan95, it's simply called constructive criticism and taken with a smile to make things better.
Another suggestion would be to say straight away that it's your 13 yo little brother and not you writing as you suggested in your first post; it helps other members putting things into perspective. Get your little brother to read lots and lots of books to see how they're written - he shouldn't be playing RE at his age! :cool:
Well, which would you prefer?
People being dishonest to save your feelings and not telling you how to ever improve, meaning your 13 year old brother gets seriously hurt when he meets the wrong person who'd poke fun at his work, swear at him, mock him and crush all desire to write again?
Or would you rather be told of his faults, so, even if it hurts now, he can still fix them at the first "draught" where no harm can be truly done and the effort amounts to something good?
on a completely unrelated note - 1995 + 13 = 2009... (its not wrong...;))
findonovan95
01-06-09, 17:22
I know, I'm sorry about my earlier post I just got realy angry. I think I get what y'all mean, I'll tell him and he can fix the mistakes himself. I must say the writing is pretty good though, isn't it?:o
-Tricell were finished off in RE5.
-T-Virus? Maybe not dead, will be fixed if so.
-Leon is an ex-RPD Agent, Chris is an ex-S.T.A.R.S agent they can both be called that.
-What's more likely a Virus that turns people into living dead or Agents from two different groups being sent to a mission together.
-Maybe it'll become a script, who knows.
-Commander and Group 324 are just temporary, will be changed on a later basis.
-Newly evolved leeches, bomb exposed the ones that lived to radiation, they bred, evolved and moved on to england. Probably hitched a ride on a cargo ship or something.
-Do you think I should tell him to put in that Wesker was revived by the leeches or is that way to far-fetched?
findonovan95
01-06-09, 18:10
Here's Chapter 2.txt! Read and enjoy. Tell me what you think but don't go out of line.;)
I quite like it but to be honest, i havent read all of it, cause i havent finished re5 yet so i dont want to read any spoilers.
But i dont like one thing, how leon speaks. He´s like: Dunno, lets roll! etc.
That isnt leon i know, if you saw re degeneration, he´s cold as ice, never smiles and even when a hot chick is near him, he´s like: You want to kiss with me? Hmmm, let me think about it.
:spy::spy::spy::spy:
What you said about leon was wrong Leon would be the kind of guy whom would say stuff like that
:spy::spy::spy::spy:
What you said about leon was wrong Leon would be the kind of guy whom would say stuff like that
Did you saw re degeneration?
Its just his personality, to be cold as ice
first of all neither me nor tzm were critical of the story, so you having a tantrum is uneccessary
as for chapter 2
there are quite a few silly mistakes such as
"acid into the blood stream vital to anything it eats away..."
the description of the umbrella worker as wears a black coat is a bit stupid, he could change his coat and then leon and chris would walk right past him, and where would it say this information? seems a strange thing to have on personel records.
as for the story as a whole, like i said before i feel this is really lacking description and doesnt have a good pace, also you should write it in word rather than a text document, it will look much nicer and will help you with spelling and grammer
there are quite a few silly mistakes such as
"acid into the blood stream vital to anything it eats away..."
as for the story as a whole, like i said before i feel this is really lacking description and doesnt have a good pace, also you should write it in word rather than a text document, it will look much nicer and will help you with spelling and grammer
Yeah, i saw some mistakes too but i dont remember what mistakes.
But i agree with you, it lacks description. I like when i can imagine the scenery from the book.
But i laughed when i have read this:
Leon blows some dust off an old file and realises that it's a pad of notes on the leeches.
Leon: "Should I read it?"
Chris: "Yeah, go ahead."
It reminds me of re1 cheesy dialogues :D.
What is this??!
What is it?!
Blood. :D
This always makes me laugh, especialy when jill is like 2 metres from the blood and askes what is it :D.
What i want to point out is, if i saw some secret documents, i wouldnt even ask for permission to read, what if i asked: Should i read it? and chris would say: No :D
i did see re degen and they made leon look like an deleted. Language! Tenebra :mad: and that was a film sure in the first resi film if u read the paper at the end it says that leon is dead so dont base anything on the films get ur facts right cause you just got burned tssssssssssss!
findonovan95
04-06-09, 11:56
Yeah they are a bit cheesy lol:D. I agree, he doesn't act like that but I guess he didn't want to look like an a** in because Chris is talking to him he'd look bad if he didn't answer. I guess he's finally left his shell hahaha:cool:. I think my brother said it'll be more of a script though but still, I'll keep on posting chapters. I wonder if Capcom will try making something of it even if they don't go along the exact idea although my brother and I would like it on xbox360 and wii with motion plus if anything lol. I'll post a summary of what he's writing. later.:thumb:
you liar u wrote itand your blamming the mistakes on ur bro
leon.s, no flaming :mad:
Can you please also make an effort and use proper English - no "u", "ur" etc, please.
i did see re degen and they made leon look like an deleted. Language! Tenebra :mad:
A cold and realistic personality, you did realise that he was a survivor of the Raccoon City incident and fighting Zombies again probably doesn't make him the happiest guy on the planet, right?
and that was a film sure in the first resi film if u read the paper at the end it says that leon is dead so dont base anything on the films
Leon is very much alive and well, if your talking about the live action films, then they are set in an entirely different reality to that of the CGI movie that is canon to the main plot in the games...
get ur facts right cause you just got burned tssssssssssss!
Get your facts right, you got chargrilled by Tenebra. :rolleyes:
you liar u wrote itand your blamming the mistakes on ur bro
Does it really matter? we all have those "My best friend did this and" moments, he's a little nervous, not helped by your blatant flaming, leave the guy alone, he's going to the effort to make something.
If your not going to be constructive, then don't bother replying at all dude, it's not cool...
A couple of notes for you, Findonovan95
-Tricell were finished off in RE5.
I suppose you COULD do it so it ended RE5 like that, but officially, no, all that happened was that Wesker died, he didn't own TriCell at all, his death wouldn't destroy the company.
-T-Virus? Maybe not dead, will be fixed if so.
Still present, not completely wiped out, they used it to produce Licker-Beta's if I'm correct..
They haven't used it since RE3 as a bioweapon itself.
-Leon is an ex-RPD Agent, Chris is an ex-S.T.A.R.S agent they can both be called that.
Well, no, you see, Leon was a former cop, but this doesn't matter, its something unusual to bring up, if anything, you should say that he is an "Active Government Agent" and "Raccoon City Survivor", sounds a tad more realistic.
Also, S.T.A.R.S wouldn't mean anything unless they knew about Wesker, they probably didn't know it was a premier tactical team outside of Raccoon City, Chris wasn't an agnet either, just a specialist cop.
-What's more likely a Virus that turns people into living dead or Agents from two different groups being sent to a mission together.
...? See above, both are possible, just need the details fixing.
-Maybe it'll become a script, who knows.
Its pretty close to a screenplay script to be honest, you need to bulk out the details and tell it more like a story rather than telling us what is happening so formally.
-Newly evolved leeches, bomb exposed the ones that lived to radiation, they bred, evolved and moved on to england. Probably hitched a ride on a cargo ship or something.
Tainted Umbrella stock, maybe?
-Do you think I should tell him to put in that Wesker was revived by the leeches or is that way to far-fetched?
This seems a bit unlikely, since he was nowhere near leeches at the time of his death, also, Marcus was an accident.
I suppose you could do it, but you will have to explain why it has happened, not right away, leave it as a surprise, I suppose it could be that one of Wesker's serum injections contaminated a leech with his DNA as they accidentally crawled across it... I dunno....
:spy:
I however liked it in the beginning until I realized the reactions, and sort of must guess that You were too, well, forward with Your head through the wall. I think You got talent, there's that definate block of ice that made me feel fine with it.
However, the lack of description says in translation perhaps that You shouldn't first of all focus on the road but on the pavement, sotosay, get something to write on instead of writing into the void (a.k.a. Background, or keep the reader to stay for a while instead of rushing him from one to the next, and that's skill of arts then).
It's not really, easy. From my experiences on writing (I've started with about 7 (+- unknown), now, about 18 years later I got almost none of my writings animore), a really high class Selfmade Novel needs time. I value Inspiration as the most important gimmick of creation since nothing can help YOu out once the Universe doesn't want You to have something You didn't deserve, in my faith.
I don't know You, Your tendancy (Good or Evil), and on Evil I can't help You, but on Good it looks so that You have got to find a way out of the Jungle first, then You can map the Jungle and then You can recreate it. It works on Evil supposedly equal, just that less is required from You once and thence perhaps even more. So, on Good it means that You need to permit God to take effect - without worrying wether it's then Yours or HIS and absolutely, depending on HIM, HE will help You so that You won't feel dashed but have a certain satisfaction from Your work. And thereby it won't work to simply stick Your head into a Cartonage, since it is as well so that by a wider distance to the problem, a larger view, God can show You different things or give You hints which You else would not have seen or understood sufficient enough (Note: One and the Same idea can work out in different ways, depending on Your point of view/approach).
Boomstick95
18-06-09, 22:21
Will you be Posting the full Novel here? And improve it? ;)
Originally Posted by findonovan95
-Tricell were finished off in RE5.
Tricell was at the end of Resident evil degen. So is Degen set affter 5 or before?
thezombiemessia
23-06-09, 17:19
Tricell was at the end of Resident evil degen. So is Degen set affter 5 or before?
Degeneration is set before RE5. But either way, TriCell weren't finished off at the end of RE5.
Wesker was using TriCell to his advantage, and managed to persuade Excella to join him, but the only things that were destroyed were their African Branch and Excella.
TriCell themselves are a multi-national corporation that would only suffer minor-losses when it comes to the events of RE5.